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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part time job while you are studying. So you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter give details of your study plans Explain why you want to get a part time job

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Dear Annie, I am just writing to let you know I have enrolled myself for
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 Science Program at Oxford University, London. It is a 2-year course which will begin
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 summer. I had to enhance my skillset, so I opted for higher education. I know you are already staying in London so it would be convenient for me as well. As a part of my curriculum, I need to work as a part-timer for 20 hours per week.
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, migrating from India would make it easier for me to be financially independent.
Otherwise
, as you are aware of the rent hikes these days in England. Working part-time will increase my affordability as well. It would be great if you could suggest to me some popular websites or career portals where I could search for these jobs.
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, please check with your manager as well, if he needs another sales associate, I would be happy to assist him. Looking forward to hearing from you. Love Elsa
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Ensure that the purpose of the letter is clearly stated and remains the focus throughout the letter. While you have mentioned your study plans, you could elaborate further on how the job could complement your studies.
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Use a more formal tone appropriate for someone who is not a close friend and ensure consistency in tone throughout. Avoid informal language or abbreviations.
coherence cohesion
Organize the letter into clear paragraphs, each containing a single idea, and make use of linking words to better connect ideas and paragraphs.
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Use appropriate greetings and sign-offs for formal letters and ensure they are in line with the level of formality of the letter's content.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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