There have been some problems with public transport in your area recently. Write a letter to the manager of the transport company. In your letter -describe the problems -explain how these problems are affecting the public -suggest some changes that could be made.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am an active member of power house road,
bathinda
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Bathinda
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. I am writing
this
letter in order to complain about the problems with public transportation. As you know, our hometown is famous for its tourist
attraction
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. Residents are having trouble with transportation
such
as minibuses, buses and vans. All are very slow and outdated. Commuters have to always wait for
atleast
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at least
half an hour and they
always
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late for their work or studies. If I am talking about the
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inhabitants are living there for a long time. But now they are thinking about moving out
from
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this
city because these buses
creates
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lot
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of pollution. As I already said these are old. I suggest you that replace these buses with e-buses and
also
keep an eye on
its
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schedule. I look forward to your prompt response to my letter and resolution to these issues. Yours sincerely, Lovepreet
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coherence cohesion
To improve the logical structure, make sure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that the argument flows seamlessly from one point to the next.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate, but make sure the body of the letter is structured into clear paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains one main idea and that this idea is expanded upon sufficiently before moving on to the next point.
task achievement
For full task achievement, make sure you describe the problems in more detail, including specific examples and how they affected the public. Additionally, elaborate on your suggested changes with more than one solution.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is mostly suitable, but be aware of using phrases that are more formal and appropriate for a letter to a manager, avoiding casual language.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plaguing
  • delays
  • frustration
  • inconvenience
  • productivity
  • rely on
  • daily commute
  • overall
  • condition
  • deteriorated
  • overcrowded
  • seating arrangements
  • compromises
  • safety
  • comfort
  • impacts
  • hygienic
  • maintenance
  • unpleasant
  • alternative
  • modes of transportation
  • congestion
  • pollution
  • fuel consumption
  • proposed
  • infrastructure
  • upgrading
  • expanding
  • cater to
  • growing population
  • focus on
  • regular maintenance
  • breakdowns
  • hire
  • train
  • customer service
  • overcrowding
  • expectations
  • managing
  • minimizing
  • appropriate action
  • reliable
  • efficient
  • sustainable
  • benefits
  • entire community
  • Thank you for your attention to this matter.
  • Yours faithfully
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