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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, an make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, an make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph
illustrats
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illustrates
 the data of different levels of annual wage of
families
 in the
united states
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United States
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 in 2007, 2011 and 2015. As far as the number of
families
 whose annual income was less than $25,000, it began with around ›5
million
 in 2007,
then
 increased to approximately 27
million
 in 2011
,
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 but decreased by 2
million
 4 years later.
Similarly
, those
of
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families
 that earned $25.000 to $49,999 were about 25
million
 in 2007, after that it rose to nearly 30
million
 in 2011.
Finally
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 it decreased to around 27
million
 in 2015.
By contrast
, the groups of
families
 which have
high
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 income, including $75,000 to $99.999 and $100,000 or more, experienced a drop in 2011, but their data went up in 2015. Interesting things could be seen in the group of middle income, the data
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 the same in 2001, 2011 and 2015.
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