Part 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Part 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The figures
demonstratres
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demonstrates
demonstrate
a variety of activities for
women
and
men
during their day. It is obvious that the predominant types of pursuits for
women
and
men
are different. In the
last
year for unemployed
men
the main
activitity
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activity
was job hunting in the morning and watching TV in the afternoon.
Another
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Other
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most popular things that
men
prefer to do in the
morhning
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morning
are shopping,
a
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housework
and
work
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working
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in a garden.
Although
,
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the job hunting activity
is went
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down in the afternoon, it's
steel
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still
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one of the main
type
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types
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of free-time spending for
men
.
Otherwise
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men
prefer to seek a job during the day,
almost
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and almost
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50% of
women
choose to do their
housework
and
shoping
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shopping
in the morning. In the afternoon, the percentage of
women
doing
housework
and
shoping
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shopping
decreased. The dominant activity is steel the
housework
,
while
others
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other
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types of
activies
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activities
have a little change. To summarise, the data in the table illustrates a variety of
activieties
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activities
for unemployed
women
and
men
. The major activities
is
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are
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simmular
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simular
similar
for them, but
percentage
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the percentage
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is different among them and during the day.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men, housework with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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