Alternative energy sources that use the natural power of the wind, waves and sun are too expensive and complicated to replace the coal, oil and gas that we use to power our cities and transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, with the rapid development of sciences and technologies,
wide
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a wide
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range of
power
sourses
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sources
have been invented and widely used . Many
believes
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that new
sourses
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sources
of
environmental
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friendly
energy
sourses
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sources
like wind, water, and solar are too costly and difficult to generate than the traditional
power
which
were
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generated by coal, petroleum, and
gas
. The following essay will demonstrate my
naturl
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natural
opinion on new
sources
of
energy
and
tradition
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sources
of
energy
. In terms of
environmental
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environmentally
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friendly
sources
, hydropower station
are
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widely used around the world, especially used in
the
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places
where
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has natural resources
such
as lakes. Solar
power
is widely used in many families. It is undeniable that these
sources
of
power
collect natural
energy
to produce reusable
energy
for our daily use, which reduces carbon
emission
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.
However
, the cons still exist,
For example
, solar
energy
will be very efficient in places
where
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has
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less sunlight, which will not be able to
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peoples
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demand for
energy
.
On the other hand
, coal and petroleum,
gas
are still very common in our daily lives. These
sources
of
powers
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power
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generates immediate and efficient
power
to meet the demand in our nowadays society.
For
example
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if a road trip is scheduled, we would prefer to ride in a petroleum vehicle rather than an EV
due to
the fact that plenty of
gas
stations are easy to find on the route. A charging station will take a
while
to find.
Furthermore
filling
gas
takes
few
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minutes, but charging an EV takes half
hour
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or an hour.
Nonetheless
, traditional
power
sources
will accelerate
the
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global warming. In conclusion, new
sources
of
energy
are
environmental
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friendly,
however
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it
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could be extremely
in
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efficient under special circumstances. Traditional
power
sources
are more efficient and easy to satisfy
majority
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demand
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.
However
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it is not as
environmental
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environmentally
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friendly as the new courses of
energy
that are reusable.
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