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The line graph gives data about people who asks to gain information at the tourist offices from January to June in UK.

The line graph gives data about people who asks to gain information at the tourist offices from January to June in UK.
The diagram provides the total
people
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 number that inquiring about information at the UK tourist offices in the first half of the observed year.
Overall
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, the line graph shows the numeric data of enquiry sources,
such
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 as in person, by letter or email, and by telephone, on a monthly basis from January to June.
While
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 the sum of
people
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 that asked for the information kept decreasing, the other two ways are showing a strong positive trend. In January, almost 500 citizens went to the tourist offices directly to gain the info and it was the least number in comparison to contacting by telephone (approximately 750) and by letter or email (more than 800).
However
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, in the next six months, the statistics kept increasing to almost 5x (nearly 2000
people
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).
In addition
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 to that, the same trend is shown by phone inquiries to 1600 requests. In contrary to that,
people
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 started to leave the mail option and decreased to more than half to less than 400 enquiries.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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