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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar chart gives information about the usage of three miscellaneous telephone calls in the UK , over an interval of 8 years.
Overall
, the total number of minutes spoken by the national and
international-fixed
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line
 and mobile calls experienced a surge from 1995 to 2002,
while
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the local-fixed
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local-fixed
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line
 made
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 upward trend until 1999 and made a backward trend between 1999 and 2002.
According to
local
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the local
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 fixed
line
 , in 1995, it started to contribute about 70
billion
 minutes
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moderately increased each year and touched a peak of 90 in 1999.
However
, it started a descending trend and consumed 70 in 2002, which is equal to 1995. Regarding
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national and international fixed
line
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the count was around 40
billion
 minutes in 1995.
In addition
, it had an upward tendency for every year until 2000.
Moreover
, it was neutral in 2001 and 2002, which is almost 60. As per the illustration of the chart , mobile calls were the least used telephone calls. The amount of usage was below 10
billion
 and it was slightly raised until 1999. After that in 2000 it
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 was tripled to 30
billion
.
Furthermore
, it soared and reached nearer to 50 in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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