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The graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph depicts the four types of Britain citizens’ expenditures
while
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traveling
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travelling
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 to other countries over a ten-year
period
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. In general, the four spending categories increased during the timeline. Apparently, holidays were the
favorite
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 activities overseas,
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 the expenses.
Initially
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, the UK natives’ biggest allocation of funds was holidays, which started at £9
billion
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 in 1993 and experienced a considerable surge, up to approximately £25
billion
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 in 2008. Unfortunately, it plummeted to about £3
billion
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 in 2009. Afterwards, the figure remained stable at around £22
billion
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 within a 4-year
period
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 and reached almost £24
billion
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 in 2013.
Subsequently
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, the other three categories’ numbers were down below the holiday by close to £6
billion
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. Business, as the second-highest category at nearly £3
billion
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 in 1993, experienced a fluctuation during the
period
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 and reached almost £5
billion
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 in 2013. Another British
residents’
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resident’s
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 expense when
traveling
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travelling
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 abroad was visiting friends and their relatives. The figure experienced an upward trend during the
period
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 and remained stable for the
last
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 5 years with around £5
billion
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.
In addition
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, miscellaneous spending represented the lowest figure, fluctuating around £2
billion
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 throughout the ten-year
period
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.
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