the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories durin 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage cahnge in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

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The bar chart illustrates

exports

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export

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earnings in five different types of

products

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in a certain country, and the table chart depicts the percentage variation basis in each product in 2015 and 2016.

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, it is obvious that

the

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apply

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petroleum

products

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generated a high income for the country,

whereas

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textiles and fabrics

reported

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as the lowest revenue in both years.

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, the only

products

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which

decresed

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decreased

decrease

its

incom

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income

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apply

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was

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were

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the stone and jewel base items. The country earned over 60

million

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dollars

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for oil-based

products

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in 2015 and grew its sales by

alomst

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almost

3% in 2016, a value of approximately 63

million

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dollars

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Additionally

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, the revenue for engineered

merchandises

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merchandise

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rosed

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rose

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significantly in 2016 and reached

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roughly 62

million

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dollars

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from 55

millions

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million

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. It is noteworthy that the farm crops section

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remained almost steady and had a marginally increase in 2016 at 0.81%.

On the other hand

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, gems and jewellery manufacture was the only product that decreased in 2016

anf

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and

fell to a mere 41

million

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dollars

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income

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in income

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in 2016.

Moreover

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while

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apparel

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the apparel

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industry allocated the lowest outlay in both years, it displayed

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apply

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notable

grow

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growth

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in 2016 and went up by 15.24%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, million, dollars with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

192 words

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