the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories durin 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage cahnge in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories durin 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage cahnge in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. 

summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
The bar chart illustrates
exports
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earnings in five different types of
products
in a certain country, and the table chart depicts the percentage variation basis in each product in 2015 and 2016.
Overall
, it is obvious that
the
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petroleum
products
generated a high income for the country,
whereas
textiles and fabrics
reported
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as the lowest revenue in both years.
Furthermore
, the only
products
which
decresed
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decreased
decrease
its
incom
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income
,
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was
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the stone and jewel base items. The country earned over 60
million
dollars
for oil-based
products
in 2015 and grew its sales by
alomst
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almost
3% in 2016, a value of approximately 63
million
dollars
.
Additionally
, the revenue for engineered
merchandises
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rosed
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rose
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significantly in 2016 and reached
to
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roughly 62
million
dollars
from 55
millions
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million
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. It is noteworthy that the farm crops section
,
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remained almost steady and had a marginally increase in 2016 at 0.81%.
On the other hand
, gems and jewellery manufacture was the only product that decreased in 2016
anf
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and
fell to a mere 41
million
dollars
income
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in 2016.
Moreover
,
while
apparel
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the apparel
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industry allocated the lowest outlay in both years, it displayed
a
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notable
grow
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in 2016 and went up by 15.24%.
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