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One of your friends recently had birthday celebration but you missed it and you forgot to tell your friend that you couldn't attend. *apologise for missing the birthday celebration *explain why you missed it and why you didn't tell your friend *and say what you would like to do show that you are sorry

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Hello Liza. How can I say, except I'm sorry that I was not able to attend your birthday party I hope you are not mad at me. I am so happy to see the photos on Instagram. I knew that it was a very important day for you.
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 meeting from foreign countries. On top of that, your party and my Congress were same day. I really wish I could have been there and I could have cut the cake with you but I didn't have a choice. I am truly sorry for that. Once again, I apologise for any inconvenience that may have been caused by not being on your birthday and I would appreciate it if you understood that matter. I believe you will forgive me
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coherence cohesion
Include a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion to strengthen the logical structure of your letter.
coherence cohesion
Develop main points with specific details and examples to better support your apology and explanation.
task achievement
Ensure that all parts of the task are addressed sufficiently. Include a clear offer of amends to fully meet the prompt regarding what you would do to show you are sorry.
coherence cohesion
Make sure your ideas flow logically from one to the other using appropriate linking words and phrases, to enhance the coherence of your letter.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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