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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

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In the present day, universities in many countries
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 not enough
science
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students
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, causing many problems for our community and
country
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. There are various reasons why there are fewer
students
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 in
science
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 majors. In the following paragraphs, the
causes
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 and effects of
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 issue will be outlined in detail. The
lack
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 of
science
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students
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 is caused by many reasons. For the first reason, there are more fields of knowledge that allow
students
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 to study in deeper detail than before.
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, in the field of arts, there are many new branches that just appeared in the present age,
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 as graphic designing and multimedia.
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, there are more
students
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 who want to study intensively in other branches causing fewer
students
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 to choose a major in
science
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. Another reason is that
science
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 subject is hard in the view of most
students
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. One example is that electrical engineering, which is one of the applied
science
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 subjects, is very complicated since
students
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 have to understand electric circuits, the
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 field and advanced mathematics.
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, most high school
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 do not choose these majors
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 their complexity.
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 problem
causes
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 many negative effects on our society.
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, the
country
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 will
lack
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 labourers who have skills in
science
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,
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 as engineers or doctors, which cause serious problems in the
country
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.
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, Thailand does have not enough doctors in the health system, which
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 a very high doctor workload and
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 doctors cannot take care of all of their patients. Another effect is that the
country
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 will
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 scientific
research
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 because
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 kind of
research
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 is mainly produced in universities. In Thailand, there is very little
research
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 because of
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, and the
lack
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 of
research
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 slows
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country's
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 development. In conclusion, there are various reasons why
students
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 do not choose to study in the field of
science
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, and
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the problem
causes
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 many struggles in the
country
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.
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,
this
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 problem can be solved by increasing encouragement from the government,
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 as giving higher salaries to researchers and scientists.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, and Mathematics)
  • career prospects
  • job market
  • technological advancement
  • innovation
  • scientific fields
  • analytical skills
  • perceived difficulty
  • global competitiveness
  • workforce imbalance
  • practical exposure
  • gender stereotypes
  • educational system
  • examination-focused
  • economic growth
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