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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with the date they opened, kilometers of route, and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with the date they opened, kilometers of route, and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table chart provides information about the subway systems in six metropolitan areas with the length in
kilometres
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, date opened and the amount
passangers
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passengers
 annually, which is given in millions.
Overall
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, the first tube was opened in London with the longest distance of railways , but Tokyo is carrying the highest amount of
passengers
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.
To begin
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 with,
London
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the London
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 tube was opened in 1863 and took
a
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apply
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first place with the distance of routes, which is 394
kilometres
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. It is nearly twice
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as expansive
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expansive
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expensive
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than
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as
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 in Paris (199
kilometres
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), but with
the
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a
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 greater amount of
passengers
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 (1191). The smallest
undeground
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underground
 railway routes are in Kyoto
as well as
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 Los Angeles, 11 and 28 respectively. but in these two
megapolicies
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megapolicies,
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 there are
also
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 the newest.
On the other hand
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, in
Tokyo
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Tokyo,
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 the metro
are
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is
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 the most popular and constitutes 1927
millions
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million
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 people per year. The distance in Paris is
also
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 huge 199
kilometres
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 with 1191
millions
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million
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passengers
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, it is the second place. Another interesting fact is in Washington the
lenght
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length
 can be compared with the number of
passengers
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 126 and 144 respectively because
this
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 city
are
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is
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 not overpopulated in comparison with others.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kilometres, passengers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railways
  • kilometers of route
  • passenger numbers
  • annually
  • compare and contrast
  • mega-cities
  • public transportation infrastructure
  • extensive network
  • rapid transit
  • capacity
  • commuter volume
  • inauguration date
  • modernization
  • vintage
  • urban development
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