You have been doing some voluntary work to help your local community. However, now you are unable to continue doing this work. Write a letter to the manager of the organization where you have been working. In your letter: - Describe the work you have been doing - Explain why you can no longer do this work - Recommend another person who is interested in the work.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to let you know that I have been working with your organization

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six months. I

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to volunteer in cleaning the lakes around the city and collect garbage from the

road-side

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Therefore

, it has always been a great experience for me to do something for the society.

This

is my

last

day with your company because I will not be able to come from next week. Let me explain my situation. You will be glad to know that I am offered a management position by my company but in another province.

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, I am moving to Abbotsford, BC

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this

Sunday.

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, it is a wonderful opportunity for my career as I

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my gratitude for allowing me to work with your organization and do something for the betterment of the community. One of my office

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Ramanpreet Kaur is willing to work with your team. I can assure you that she is a brilliant worker who wants to give back to the society.

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, I really hope that you will give her a chance. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Simranpreet Kaur Bhullar

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

207 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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