Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to change our character traits. To what extent do you agree?

It is believed that our character traits have been decided since before we were born
as a result
of the
genes
and as human beings, we can do nothing about it.
However
, I strongly disagree with
this
statement because I am sure that society’s personality is reluctant to the situation and every individual can change. First of all, I believe that society’s behaviour is the result of their interaction with their environment and how they were taught in the first place. The fact that not all parents from good and well-behaved families have good kids shows that not all
genes
are inherited by their children. folk who are born from rich families should have gotten more access to good educations and
that is
why they should be well-mannered.
Moreover
, they have been trained since young.
On the other hand
, some underprivileged folks who come from poor family sometimes would be seen as ignorant and rude because they are never told how to handle the situation in a good manner by their family.
However
, the reality is much more complex than that.
For example
,
if
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before going to school parents from poor families teach their kids to have more empathy and learn how to behave, it will always engrain in his/her minds.
Therefore
,
this
kid will help the other without any complaints at all.
Therefore
, personality
could not
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be determined
from
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the
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genes
.
Secondly
, there is a saying that people always change
time
by
time
. There is no guarantee that good people will stay good until the end of their lives. A villain could be a hero and vice-versa.
For instance
, Umar bin Khattab was
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enemy in Prophet Muhammad's story but
then
he realized that he did wrong until
finally
he changed his heart and began to love Islam and became a legend in Islam’s history. In conclusion, I never believe that traits have been decided since before human beings were born
as a result
of
genes
and we can not do anything about it. It always depends on the situation and people always change
time
by
time
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predetermined
  • character traits
  • genetic influence
  • environmental factors
  • personality development
  • upbringing
  • foundation
  • evolution of traits
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