The pie charts below show the results of a survey on the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart given illustrates the survey’s outcome of European adults about numerous leisure
activities
that had
appeared from 1985 to 1995. Unnecessary verb
apply
Overall
, watching TV still occupies the first position with the largest data in both 1985 and 1995 and other activities
also
have some fluctuations.
As can be seen in the charts given, between 1985 and 1995, many activities
for relatives such
as watching TV, eating out, and talking with family have significantly decreased from 32%, 23%, and 18% to 30%, 8%, and 7% respectively. Besides
, many activities
for friends have quickly increased. This
data proved that they had almost spent their time for
playing computer games and talking with friends in 1995 when the number of Change preposition
apply
play
games Replace the word
playing
gains
27% and the quantity of time that they had talked with their friends Wrong verb form
gained
gains
26%. Wrong verb form
gained
In addition
, other activities
also
have a slightly
decline from 6% in 1985 to 2% in 1995.Change the adverb
slight
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