The pie charts below show the results of a survey on the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the results of a survey on the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart given illustrates the survey’s outcome of European adults about numerous leisure
activities
that
had
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appeared from 1985 to 1995.
Overall
, watching TV still occupies the first position with the largest data in both 1985 and 1995 and other
activities
also
have some fluctuations. As can be seen in the charts given, between 1985 and 1995, many
activities
for relatives
such
as watching TV, eating out, and talking with family have significantly decreased from 32%, 23%, and 18% to 30%, 8%, and 7% respectively.
Besides
, many
activities
for friends have quickly increased.
This
data proved that they had almost spent their time
for
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playing computer games and talking with friends in 1995 when the number of
play
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games
gains
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27% and the quantity of time that they had talked with their friends
gains
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26%.
In addition
, other
activities
also
have a
slightly
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decline from 6% in 1985 to 2% in 1995.
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