The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the transformation of
prices
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for
copper
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, nickel, and
zinc
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per month in 2014, with the data measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is evident that
the
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zinc
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prices
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increased throughout the period,
while
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others decreased. In terms of the highest changes, nickel stood at 6% in January. It witnessed a significant decline to 1% in March.
Moreover
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,
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this
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these
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changes still continued until June with
the
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rates of 3% before
bounced
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back to 1% in December.
Additionally
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,
this
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fluctuation made the Nickel as the lowest changes
in
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at
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the end of the period. Regarding the remaining metals price,
zinc
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and
copper
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began at 1% and 2% in January, respectively.
While
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the
zinc
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prices
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rose slightly to 3% in the first 2
month
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before
fell
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falling
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to -1% in June, the
copper
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prices
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since the beginning experienced a moderate fall to around -0.5% in May.
Furthermore
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, in December, with
0.5
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a 0.5
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% difference, the rates of change in the
zinc
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prices
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overtook the
copper
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prices
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at 0.5%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, copper, zinc with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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