The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
The diagrams above show the various stages and equipment used to make
cement
, and how
cement
is used to make concrete.
Overall
, in order to create concrete the
cement
must first be put through a process that involves the mixing of various chemicals.
After
this
, there are three different types of equipment used to produce
cement
. It is
this
cement
that will
then
be mixed with other components causing concrete to be made.
Initially
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Initially,
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2 ingredients, limestone and clay, are put through a crushing machine to create a form of
cement
powder.
This
powder
then
goes through a mixer. The next stage involves the powder being heated in the rotational heater, which will
then
be taken through the grinder. At
this
point the
cement
has been created and is ready to be put into bags.
This
cement
(15%), alongside water (10%), sand (25%) and gravel (50%), is
then
churned through a concrete mixer.
This
creates concrete which, is now
is
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fit to be used for building purposes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • construction
  • cement-making
  • raw materials
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • heating
  • grinding
  • cement powder
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • versatility
  • strength
  • aggregate
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