The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.

The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020.
The given bar chart illustrates the five major industries in Canada's
workforces
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in the years of 1850 and 2020 in percentage.
Overall
, it can be seen that
at the end
of the period, the majority of the workforce was recorded as the services industry
while
the energy and water industries' workforces were the very least amount for both given years. In the year 1850, manufacturing
workers
' contribution was high around 36%
also
second contribution from the services workforce was about 33% and agriculture or fishing
workers
recorded 22% in
this
period.
However
, the very least amount of employers accounted for energy and construction about 3% and 5% respectively.
On the other hand
, in the year 2020 most influencing industry in Canada was services which was recorded as the highest among them about 82%. But other sectors made the very least contribution around 9% from manufacturing and 8% from construction
workers
.
However
,
workers
from agriculture and energy recorded the same amount of 1% which was the lowest workforce found
at the end
of the period.
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