IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. A friend you met last year has invited you to visit him/her in his/her country. You have never been there before and need some information before you leave. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: request advise about a gift for his/her family ask about activities and clothing in his/her country find out about the food You do NOT need to write any address. You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Miya, I am writing
this
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 letter regarding your invitation
in
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to
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 your country. I am planning to visit next month. Since I am going to stay a month there I need some suggestions related to gifts, favourite activities and ,of course, good food options in your country. First of all, I will be
exited
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 to give presents to your parents because it will be the first time to meet with your family. I am going to take some kitchen sets but if you have another idea, please, share it with me
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,
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 I have some information about Venice and its beautiful and unique
sightseeings
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, I have no idea which one is best and where I can go.
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, I would be pleased if you
share
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 your favourite ones.
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, if you give some details about clothes which are suit next month and the weather, it will be
your
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in your
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 favour.
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, the meals are
also
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 really important because you know your cuisine
are
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is
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 extremely
differ
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different
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 from ours. I am looking forward to
take
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receiving
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 your response letter as soon as possible. Best wishes, Yulduz Otajonova.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a clear main idea, supported by relevant details without unnecessary digressions.
coherence cohesion
Maintain consistency in verb tenses throughout the letter for better clarity; the switch from future to present to past tense can be confusing.
coherence cohesion
To increase the logical structure score, work on linking your ideas more coherently with a range of cohesive devices and appropriate paragraphing.
task achievement
You should expand on each point required by the task; some content areas are not fully developed. For example, give more specifics about the activities and clothing appropriate for the weather.
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Be sure to ask specific questions regarding the food, rather than making a general statement about its importance, to better achieve the task requirements.
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Minor grammatical errors and incorrect word choices, such as 'exited' instead of 'excited' and 'suit' instead of 'suitable,' should be corrected.
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The tone is generally suitable for a letter to a friend, but some parts could be made more personal and engaging to make the letter sound warm and genuine.
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