The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The line graph gives a comparison between the number of foreign tourists in three different areas - the
coast
, the mountains and the lakes
, between the years
1987 and 2007.
Overall
, the mountains show a stable growth of visitors over the years
as compared to the coast
and the lakes
. However
, a significant change can be seen in the graph of the lakes
as compared to the coast
.
The number of people visiting the mountains range
from 20,000 to 30,000 in the first decade, Correct subject-verb agreement
ranges
that is
, from 1987 to 1997. The count remains fairly stable until 2002, and slightly goes up to nearly 35,000 by the year 2007.
In case
of the Correct article usage
the case
lakes
, a steep graph can be observed; the amount of people visiting the lakes
in 1997 is seen to be 10,000 and by 1997 it goes up to 40,000. The most
increment in the figure is in the Correct word choice
highest
years
1997-2002 where it reaches nearly 75,000. However
, there is a sharp decline in the years
2002-2007, where
it comes down to 50,000.
The coastal regionCorrect word choice
when
starts
off with a count of 40,000 visitors in 1987 , but the count slightly Wrong verb form
started
drops
to 35,000 by the year 1992.
Wrong verb form
dropped
However
, the number of people visiting the coast
are
seen to be linearly increasing between Change the verb form
is
years
1992 and 2007 Correct article usage
the years
,
and Remove the comma
apply
reaches
Wrong verb form
reached
upto
Correct your spelling
up to
the
total of 70,000.Correct article usage
a
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coast, lakes, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "goes up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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