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Nowadays companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear uniform. Think about jobs where uniform is important. What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform?

#companies #organisations #employees #uniform #jobs
People
 have a tendency to judge
about
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somebody
looking
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by looking
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 at his or her clothes
style
.
Whereas
 doing any job
it
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can prevent
from
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productive collaborative
work
! So, in my view, wearing a
uniform
 is a brilliant decision to escape problems at
work
. The first benefit of having
uniform
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a uniform
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 at
work
 is
a
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the
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 possibility
to be
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of being
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 equal with all your
collegues
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colleagues
. You
work
 in a team where
the
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appearance and
style
 can't weaken your business potential.
Moreover
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 that makes your stuff united and different from any other.
On the other
hand
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hand,
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 the fact of wearing a
uniform
 might become a business card of your organisation and attract partners or consumers to deal with you. For
examle
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example
, a lot of
people
 prefer
this
 or that air travelling companies referring to
steardesses'
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stewardesses
uniform
.
In
addition
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 a lot of uniforms have become universal and highly recognisable among
people
 including policemen and emergency
stuff
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staff
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. Being faced with a problem you are expected to ask for help from a person wearing
official
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an official
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uniform
.
However
, for some categories of
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the population
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population
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population,
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 the question of a
uniform
 at
work
 is still controversial. The argument of
people
 who are against it is that a common
style
 may vanish their unique features and spoil
personality
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their personality
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. In my view, in creative spheres where
a
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style
 is one of the ways to present yourself a
uniform
 mustn't be obligatory.
People
 in these fields are regarded to impress and inspire and, as everyone knows, clothes are a good way to do it.
Overall
, uniforms are highly useful for different jobs to have a common look and be
noticable
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noticeable
.
In
contrast
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contrast,
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 actors, singers and
people
 of other creative jobs must have a right
toexpress
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to express
 themselves by means of clothing
style
.
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