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The maps below show the changes in a town

The maps below show the changes in a town
#maps #show #changes #town
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Looking for more details, there will be a new round
road
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surrounded
Wrong verb form
surrounding
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 the
centre
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 to connect
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road
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the road
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 around the area from the countryside in the north to
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the hosing
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hosing
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housing
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 area in the south in
circle
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a circle
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 way and
separate
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a separate
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 school and one housing area to stand outside the circle
road
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. In the shop and main
road
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 areas in the north of the
centre
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, there will be
new
Correct article usage
a new
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 bus station on the left side of the
road
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in
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on
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Correct article usage
the west-side
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west-side
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west side
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 followed by
shopping
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a shopping
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centre
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, car parks,
new
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and new
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 housing which will be established respectively. Under those new facilities, it will be
pedetraians
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pedestrians
pedestrian
,
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however
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however,
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 the shop upper the housing areas will
be remained
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remain
have remained
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. Considering
at
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apply
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the residential housing located in the south of the
centre
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 inside the circle
road
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, it will change
place
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the place
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 from the middle of the location to
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the west-side
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west-side
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west side
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 and
it
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apply
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will be
additional
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additionally
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 housing constructed
in
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on
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Correct article usage
the east-side
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east-side
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east side
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.
Moreover
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, the park will be renovated to be in smaller areas.
Lastly
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, the housing located outside the round
road
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 will be moved to the eastern of the maps.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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