You recently sent some documents by post, but they did not arrive. Write a letter to the post manager. In your letter Give details of the situation Describe the documents Say what action you want the post office to take.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

letter to complain because

sent some

documents

by your service

last

week, but they did not arrive

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destination

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the destination

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This

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These

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documents

are very crucial for my extension

passport

, and my

passport

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will

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expired

Wrong verb form

expire

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next week. If

documents

does

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not arrive next week,

must pay more expensive.

Although

know some delays because

bad

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of bad

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weather,

need to present hard copies to the immigration. I

pack

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my extension

passport

in one big brown envelope, and

labelled it "

Passport

extension". I

also

included my current address and

the

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immigartion

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immigration

address as well.

However

forgot to mention my phone number. I hope that you

could

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help me to track my

documents

. I am really happy

your

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help because

do not have time to resend my

documents

again

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apply

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. If you find

documents

, please call me as soon as possible. Thank you Yours faithfully, Andrianto Raharja

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coherence cohesion

Ensure there is a clear introduction, development of ideas, and a conclusion. The letter currently lacks a strong opening and closing statement.

coherence cohesion

Use paragraphs to separate different ideas for better organization and readability. Each paragraph should address a single point or aspect of the situation.

task achievement

The response must fully satisfy the task, including details of the situation, description of the documents, and requested action. The letter should be expanded to include these details more explicitly.

task achievement

Maintain a consistent and suitable tone throughout the letter. While the tone is mostly appropriate, watch for informal language and ensure professionalism.

5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

154 words

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