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You recently sent some documents by post, but they did not arrive. Write a letter to the post manager. In your letter Give details of the situation Describe the documents Say what action you want the post office to take.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter to complain because
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 sent some
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 by your service
last
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 week, but they did not arrive
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destination
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This
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documents
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 are very crucial for my extension
passport
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, and my
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is
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expired
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 next week. If
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does
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 not arrive next week,
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 must pay more expensive.
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 know some delays because
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 weather,
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 need to present hard copies to the immigration. I
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 my extension
passport
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 in one big brown envelope, and
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 labelled it "
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 extension". I
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 included my current address and
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immigartion
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immigration
 address as well.
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,
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 forgot to mention my phone number. I hope that you
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 help me to track my
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. I am really happy
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 help because
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 do not have time to resend my
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again
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. If you find
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, please call me as soon as possible. Thank you Yours faithfully, Andrianto Raharja
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coherence cohesion
Ensure there is a clear introduction, development of ideas, and a conclusion. The letter currently lacks a strong opening and closing statement.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphs to separate different ideas for better organization and readability. Each paragraph should address a single point or aspect of the situation.
task achievement
The response must fully satisfy the task, including details of the situation, description of the documents, and requested action. The letter should be expanded to include these details more explicitly.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent and suitable tone throughout the letter. While the tone is mostly appropriate, watch for informal language and ensure professionalism.
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