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The plans below show the layout of a university 's sports centre now,and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The plans illustrate the current layout of a university
sports
 complex and proposals for its redevelopment.
Overall
, the university
sports
 centre is expected to become much bigger with new recreational facilities planned
such
 as dance studios, a leisure
pool
, shops and a
sports
 hall. At present, behind the reception area, there is a 25-metre indoor
pool
 with a changing room and a seating area on either side, including a gym toward the rear of the building.
In addition
, there are two separate outdoor courts adjacent to the main building on the east and west
side
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. Regarding future plans, the outdoor courts are set to be removed and the building is planned to be upgraded to a self-contained
sports
 facility. The current
pool
 is going to remain as it is and a large leisure
pool
 with a changing room is expected to be built in the west wing. A proposed
sports
 centre in the east wing will include dance studios and a changing room. There are
also
 proposals for a
sports
 shop and a cafe in the reception area.
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Task Achievement
For Task Achievement, ensure that your essay comprehensively addresses all parts of the prompt. It is crucial to provide not only a description of the changes but also a comparison where applicable, thus enabling a clearer understanding of the differences between the current and future plans.
Coherence & Cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, maintain a logical structure throughout the essay. Use a range of cohesive devices to link ideas together effectively and clarify relationships between different parts of your description. Additionally, make sure to have a distinguishable introduction and conclusion that succinctly summarize the main points of the essay.

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