The table below shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998
The present table gives information about the amount of earnings by adults and children to use up 4
regularly
things (Change the word
regular
food
electronic equipment
, music and videos
) in the UK in 1998.
Broadly it can be seen that woman
spent most of their income on Fix the agreement mistake
women
food
in contrast
boys
. Children didn't pay as much for Change preposition
to boys
food
as for electronic equipment
and music.
It can be clearly seen from the table that, adults 25% of their pay for food
, women's
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women
for
most of Change preposition
apply
this
is 39% and men 24%. In comparison
electronic Add a comma
comparison,
equipment
was high by men than women. Musics
and Change the wording
Music
Kinds of music
Pieces of music
videos
are least popular amoung
adults and Correct your spelling
among
they're
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they
pay
for Wrong verb form
paid
videos
1 persent
only.
Children use their money on Correct your spelling
per cent
person
food
and music almost the same persent
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person
with
Change preposition
as
boys
and girls
. The popular item is electronic equipment
for boys
because boys
spend money 18% in contrast
girls
because Change preposition
to girls
of
Change preposition
apply
girls
only spend 5%. The pay for videos
persentage
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percentage
almost
the same by 18% and 17%, between Add a missing verb
is almost
boys
and girls
, respectively.Submitted by xamraqulovrozimuhammad on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, equipment, videos, boys, girls with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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