The chart below shows a comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.

The chart below shows a comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.
The given pie charts provide information about the
figure
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figures
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for
energy
manufacturing in France between
two
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the two
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years
, 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, coal and gas
energy
remained the highest proportion in both
years
.
Meanwhile
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nuclear and other
energy
accounted for less than 10%.
According to
the charts,
energy
generated by coal made up 29,80% in 1995,
then
there was a slight increase in 2005, about 30.93%.
Similarly
,
energy
from gas
also
increased slightly from 29,63% to 30,31% in 10
years
.
By contrast
, petro was the only source which decreased from 29,27% in 1995 to 19,55% 10
years
later.
On the other hand
, nuclear and other power accounted for the
least
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lowest
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proportion of total
energy
produced, 4,90% with other
energy
and 6,40% with nuclear sources in 1995,
then
increased
9,10
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% and 10,10%, respectively in the next ten
years
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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