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The chart below shows a comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.

The chart below shows a comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.
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The given pie charts provide information about the
figure
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 for
energy
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 manufacturing in France between
two
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the two
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years
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, 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, coal and gas
energy
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 remained the highest proportion in both
years
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.
Meanwhile
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 nuclear and other
energy
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 accounted for less than 10%.
According to
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 the charts,
energy
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 generated by coal made up 29,80% in 1995,
then
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 there was a slight increase in 2005, about 30.93%.
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,
energy
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 from gas
also
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 increased slightly from 29,63% to 30,31% in 10
years
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.
By contrast
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, petro was the only source which decreased from 29,27% in 1995 to 19,55% 10
years
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 later.
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, nuclear and other power accounted for the
least
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lowest
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 proportion of total
energy
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 produced, 4,90% with other
energy
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 and 6,40% with nuclear sources in 1995,
then
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 increased
9,10
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% and 10,10%, respectively in the next ten
years
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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