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In schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts, while boys like science. what are the reasons for this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed?

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Introduction
Schools
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In schools
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 and universities,
girls
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 like to choose
arts
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,
while
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boys
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 like
science
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.
subject
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 choose is depend on
student's
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the student's
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mind set
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mindset
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 and
their
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apply
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gols
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goals
. I think most of the
girls
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prefer
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prefer to
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 enjoy and
romantic
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be romantic
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.so
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so
 they select
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arts related
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arts-related
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 subjects. But
boys
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 are interesting logical studies.
theirfore
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Therefore
, they select
science
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subject
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subjects
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.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand, in
modern
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the modern
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 era,
girls
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 like
with
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to
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 enjoy and
studies
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study
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, so they decide to
study
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arts
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 stream.
for example
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, music, drama,
tamil
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Tamil
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,
geographic
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geography
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,and dance. nowadays, these are more rending subjects.so,
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girls
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girls'
girl's
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mind
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 like to select
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arts
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art
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 scream. most of the universities are available
all
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for all
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 the
arts
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 subjects and can
study
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 their own language. so
girls
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 choose these scream and
also
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,
studing
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studying
 enjoy and relax. after
studing
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studying
, can go to other
show
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shows
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.can participate
competitive
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in competitive
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 programs. more opportunities are available.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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,
boys
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 have been
interesing
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interested
to
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in studying
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study
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science
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. because
boy's
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boys'
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mind
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minds
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 like logical
study
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 and they
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are interest
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interest
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interested
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in problem
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problem solving
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problem-solving
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 and
reserch
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research
 so they decide to choose
science
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site
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sites
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. they think
this
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subject
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 help
to
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in
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future
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the future
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to
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apply
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their
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apply
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. and can earn more money.
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for
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For
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boys
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 like
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to analys
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analys
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analyse
 their society. and find the problems.so they choose
this
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subject
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.
Conclusion
In Conclusion, In my point of view,
subject
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 selection is not
depend
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dependent
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 on gender. that decide their
prefer
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preference
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, their
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mind set
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mindset
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, and
also
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, their
gols
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goals
. it is full freedom.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure correct spelling of key terms (e.g., 'goals' instead of 'gols' and 'stream' instead of 'scream') to maintain clarity and professionalism in your writing.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs with distinct introductory, body, and concluding sections. Each paragraph should have a central idea that is explored and supported throughout.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of linking words to create cohesion between sentences and clarity of argument progression (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'However', 'Therefore').
task achievement
Fully address both parts of the task by discussing the reasons behind the trend and giving a clear opinion on whether this tendency should be changed.
task achievement
Develop your points with relevant examples and clear reasoning to illustrate your arguments effectively. Avoid overgeneralizations without supporting evidence.
task achievement
Remember to proofread your work for grammatical accuracy and to enhance the overall coherence and cohesion of your essay.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • reasons
  • ideas
  • people
  • home
  • school
  • teacher
  • parents
  • friends
  • clubs
  • jobs
  • work
  • money
  • choice
  • option
  • equal
  • help
  • support
  • change
  • role model
  • arts
  • science
  • future
  • study
  • career
  • experience
  • opportunity
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