the shown line graph demonstrates the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries and the diagram presents the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

the shown line graph demonstrates the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries and the diagram presents the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
The line graph illustrates the number of
books
borrowed from four village libraries in four different months in 2014 and the diagram shows the proportion of types of
books
borrowed over
this
time.
Overall
, it is noticeable from the graphs that three varieties of
books
borrowed including West Eaton, Sutton Wood and Church Mount increased, and Fiction had the highest percentage among different types of
books
in 4 months of 2014. The line graph describes the volume of Sutton Wood borrowed as 250 in June 2014
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and fluctuated
then
reached a peak of 300 in September 2014,
while
Ryeslip borrowed with the amount of 300 in June,
then
decreased sharply to 175 in September 2014. It can be seen from the diagram that Fiction was the highest borrowed at 43%, over four times compared with Self-Help. Forms of
books
borrowed as History and Science have the same proportion of 14%,
while
Biography has a higher percentage of 19%.
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