the shown line graph demonstrates the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries and the diagram presents the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

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The line graph illustrates the number of

books

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borrowed from four village libraries in four different months in 2014 and the diagram shows the proportion of types of

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borrowed over

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time.

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, it is noticeable from the graphs that three varieties of

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borrowed including West Eaton, Sutton Wood and Church Mount increased, and Fiction had the highest percentage among different types of

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in 4 months of 2014. The line graph describes the volume of Sutton Wood borrowed as 250 in June 2014

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and fluctuated

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reached a peak of 300 in September 2014,

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Ryeslip borrowed with the amount of 300 in June,

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decreased sharply to 175 in September 2014. It can be seen from the diagram that Fiction was the highest borrowed at 43%, over four times compared with Self-Help. Forms of

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borrowed as History and Science have the same proportion of 14%,

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Biography has a higher percentage of 19%.

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the shown line graph demonstrates the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries and the diagram presents the percentage of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

Some people say that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Traffic and housing problems in major cities could be solved by moving large companies, factories and their employees to the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree?