This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country.
The line graph provides the information on percentage of four types of
items
that were recycled between 1982 and 2010.
Overall
, the proportion of recycling various
items
appear increasing,
however
, plastics remains almost unchanged and paper experience fluctuations.
To begin
with, the process
recycling
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of recycling
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Aluminum cans and plastics started late compared to glass and paper
on
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in
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around 1998 and 1992 respectively.
Aluminum
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Aluminium
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bottles constantly
rises
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over the period of time from approximately less than 5% to more than 40% which is the highest rising rate in the graph.
In contrast
,
plastics
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plastic
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items
remains
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on
bottom
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throughout the time with less than 10% being recycled. The remaining two
items
seems
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somehow similar on
graph
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the graph
a graph
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. Glass containers
begins
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convert
from
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in
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1982
with
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at
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50
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a 50
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% rate,
drops
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dropped
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to 40% in
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the 90s
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90s
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'90s
and steadily
climbs
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up to 60% until 2010. With regard to cardboard and paper, their rate of recycling was less than 70%
in
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at
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the start which
touch
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the 70% margin in 2010 after experiencing fluctuation.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words items with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.

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  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • percentage
  • paper and cardboard
  • glass
  • plastic
  • metal
  • stable
  • noticeable
  • rise
  • significant increase
  • accounting for
  • consistent
  • ste steadily
  • dramatically
  • nearly
  • worth noting
  • relatively low
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