The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The Bar chart depicts a little alteration information about the outlook of
individuals
who arose in and outside of Australia
having life
in urban,rural and towns from 1995 to 2010.
Replace the word
lived
Overall
, those
Change preposition
of those
individuals
who arose in Australia
, majority
of them Correct article usage
the majority
was
in Correct subject-verb agreement
were
urban
field in both time intervals.Add an article
the urban
an urban
While
those who llived
in rural space, their population Correct your spelling
lived
was
increased Unnecessary verb
apply
then
decreased.However
those mortals who resided in towns were decreased with time Add a comma
However,
interval
.
Fix the agreement mistake
intervals
Those
Change preposition
Of those
individuals
who arose outside the
Correct article usage
apply
Australia
,largest
Correct article usage
the largest
was resided
in Change to the active voice
resided
has resided
urban
field and Add an article
the urban
remaind
Correct your spelling
remained
remain
remind
same
in both time Correct article usage
the same
interval
.Fix the agreement mistake
intervals
However
those who were
lived in rural Verb problem
apply
space
their probability Fix the agreement mistake
spaces
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
dramaticaly
decreased.Correct your spelling
dramatically
While
those who came from town,their outlook was
Unnecessary verb
apply
slightlyn
decreased in Correct your spelling
slightly
next
interval.
In 1995, about 45% Correct article usage
the next
individuals
in Change preposition
of individuals
Australia
were arose
in Change the verb form
arose
urban
field and almost 60% were Add an article
the urban
in
outside means their probability was high in outside.Change preposition
apply
Those
who lived in rural areas Change preposition
Of those
about
30% which was higher Add a missing verb
were about
in
outside about 40%.Mortals who arose in towns in Change preposition
apply
Australia
was 25% which was greater than those who lived in
outside of Change preposition
apply
Australia
about 15%.
In 2010,the individuals
who lived in Australia
was 60% which became lower than the outside about 80%Submitted by mahmadghani32 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words individuals, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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