Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job. They want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion
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Improvement Suggestions
3Ensure logical progression of ideas throughout the essay. Use clear topic sentences to introduce the main idea of each paragraph, and develop that idea with supporting evidence and examples.
Include a clear introduction that states your position on the issue and a conclusion that summarizes your main points and reiterates your opinion.
Elaborate and explain the main ideas more deeply, providing a balanced argument by discussing both views even if you agree with one. Then, substantiate your ideas with relevant, specific examples.
Include an introduction and conclusion
A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.
The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.
The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:
- Summary
- Restatement of thesis
- Prediction or recommendation
Example:
To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.
Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:
- In conclusion
- To conclude
- To summarize
- Finally
- In a nutshell
- In general