Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job. They want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion

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Gone are the days when
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were not given equality, thanks to
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and empowerment which has
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gender equality. Few masses argue that providing equivalent opportunities is
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.
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individuals believe that many tasks
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designed for men which
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cannot carry out.
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, I stand with the former view and shall discuss its aspects with related examples There are multiple factors
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the notion of non-discrimination.
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, by providing
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the female
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the burden
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. Two exemplify a survey
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conducted by News India channel, which showed the outcome that 59% of the families of India support
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work and
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their financial crisis by 5% annually.
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, freedom of choice promotes growth. To demonstrate the government of India has initiated many start-up plans, small scale, business opportunities with good return on investment to bring hidden skills in front and promote
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empowerment.
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following the path of justness ,
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always
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morale and establishes a sense of faith and honesty.
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, as per the article from The Tribune explains that 63% of the
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of our country are bagged by their parents to achieve their goals. It elevates the trust level and
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story short, the right to choose
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belongs to everyone. so in my opinion, both men and
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must be given an equal chance to support their families.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure logical progression of ideas throughout the essay. Use clear topic sentences to introduce the main idea of each paragraph, and develop that idea with supporting evidence and examples.
coherence cohesion
Include a clear introduction that states your position on the issue and a conclusion that summarizes your main points and reiterates your opinion.
task achievement
Elaborate and explain the main ideas more deeply, providing a balanced argument by discussing both views even if you agree with one. Then, substantiate your ideas with relevant, specific examples.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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