IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3

More and more companies are allowing employee to work at home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#companies #employee #work #home #development
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The situation
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
today allows office workers to
work
Use synonyms
 remotely from their
Use synonyms
home
Fix the agreement mistake
homes
show examples
 and
this
Linking Words
 trend is experiencing high growth. In my
opinion
Add a comma
opinion,
show examples
 its advantages outweigh its disadvantages, which will
we
Correct your spelling
be
show examples
 proved by the given information in
this
Linking Words
 essay. Obviously, working from
home
Use synonyms
 is more comfortable for people in most ways. One of the big advantages is that employees are not required to wake up early in the morning and wade through morning traffic jams on the road.
Additionally
Linking Words
, many companies don’t pay for transportation so working from
home
Use synonyms
 saves
worker`s
Change noun form
workers
show examples
 money and nerves that can be spent in traffic jams or in a transport crowd of people. By the way, the downsides of remote
work
Use synonyms
 cannot be ignored. One of its primary adverse impacts is a lack of focus. When
employee
Add an article
an employee
the employee
show examples
 works in the office they will be watched by the administration so it gives some kind
a
Correct your spelling
of
show examples
 stress to
work
Use synonyms
 but in their
Use synonyms
home
Add a comma
home,
show examples
 they will be able to do their
work
Use synonyms
 in the best conditions and the individual may become lazier and won`t do the
work
Use synonyms
. In conclusion, virtual
work
Use synonyms
 has both advantages and disadvantages. there are several positives
such
Linking Words
 as no commuting, more available time schedules, and being cost-effective, that companies enable flexible
work
Use synonyms
 policies.
However
Linking Words
, the negatives should not be forgotten and include distractions and poor social interaction. It is my conviction that
work
Use synonyms
-from-
home
Use synonyms
 policy has more positive impacts than negative ones.
Submitted by turdiyev_98 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Your essay should have a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Ensure each paragraph deals with a single idea and use appropriate paragraphing. Make sure that these paragraphs follow each other in a logical order, providing clear progression of ideas.
coherence cohesion
Your essay should have fully developed ideas supported by reasons and examples. Each paragraph should present one clear idea related to the thesis. Moreover, make an effort to connect ideas using linking devices in a way that the reader can easily follow your line of reasoning.
task achievement
Ensure that your response is fully related to the task. Answer all parts of the task, expressing a clear position throughout the response. Develop your ideas appropriately and provide evidence or examples to support your opinions. Be sure that your response remains focused on the question without irrelevant details.
task achievement
Strive to present clear and well-developed ideas rather than vague or underdeveloped concepts. Try to elaborate on your points and give detailed reasons behind your statements.
task achievement
It is important to illustrate your ideas with specific examples. Such examples add weight to your arguments and make them more convincing. Make an effort to include relevant examples that are directly connected to the main points of your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: