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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
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The bar graph portrays the
percentage
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 of
households
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 in owned and rented
accommodation
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 in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011. It can be inferred that the
percentage
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 of
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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 in 1918 was around a quarter and it has linearly increased from 1918 to 2001, which has the highest number of
households
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 owned
percentage
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 by their respective owners i.e., about 70
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. In 2011, a minor decrease can be seen in 2001 of 5
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, the
percentage
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 of
households
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 in rented
accommodation
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 has gradually decreased from 1918 being almost more than 75
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percent
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 to just above 30
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percentage
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 in 2001. In 2011, a slight increase
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 seen compared to a decade ago by 5
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, it can be inferred that people have started residing in their abode over the years. In 1971, there seems to be an equal contribution of
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a percentage
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 of
households
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 in owned and rented
accommodation
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. After 1971, the
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 of
households
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 in owned
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 has overpowered the
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 of
households
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 in rented
accommodation
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, households, accommodation, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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