A persons worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor,kindness and trust, longer seem important. To what extent do you agreee or disagree with this option ?

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other factors to judge a particular person.I tend to agree that judging that judging a person
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seems to be a good practice despite having a bit of truth in it. As it is said '
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believe that we people do not have the power or the authority to
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a person from which social
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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