The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people who were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people who were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph depicts the percentage of
people
who were born in and outside of Australia living in
metropolian
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metropolitan
areas, towns and rural districts in 1995 and 2010. In 1995, about 55% of
people
who
born
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were born
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in Australia lived in cities,
however
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however,
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in
2010
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2010,
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it increased to about 64%. Other
people
who lived in towns and rural
districs
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districts
dicreased
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decreased
from 20% and 30% respectively to about 17% for each. As for
people
who were born in foreign countries in 1995 about 60% of them
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were accomodated
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accomodated
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accommodated
in cities. Already in
2010
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2010,
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these
group
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groups
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increased by 20%.
Also
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there
were
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was
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significant
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a significant
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decrease in
group
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the group
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who lived in rural areas from 40% in 1995 to about 5% in 2010. There
were
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was
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steep
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a steep
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down in
third
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group who
accomodated
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accommodated
in tows from about 10% to
approximatyle
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approximately
7% in 2010.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that
percentage
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the percentage
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rate of populations in
metropolian
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metropolitan
areas in Australia
gradully
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gradually
increased,
whereas
in rural and towns the rate went down.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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