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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart
undergraduate
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 courses. As for the table below, it represents
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the wage
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wage
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wages
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 of the
graduates
 (there are data provided about the type of employment and range of salaries with 5-year experience). The fact that becomes
clean
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clear
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 from studying the chart is that the majority of the
graduates
 find
a Full time
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full-time
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work
(52%). As for another part of the
students
, they find part-time
work
 which is 15% of them all. Third by the quantity is
group
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the group
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 of unemployed who are
taken
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12%
from
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of
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 all
graduates
.
Next
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 group contains
students
 who
work
 full time and do postgraduate studies and is estimated by 8% of the total amount, their number is equal to the
quantity
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 of
students
,
i
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, and their number is equal to that of
students
 for whom no information is available. The
last
 group are people who combine part-time
work
 with postgraduate study and
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in
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 5% of the given amount. As far as the table given below
are
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is
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 concerned,
graduates
 who
work
 in the government sector
has got
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 the highest salaries (5% - $25,000-49,999, 15% - $50,000-74,999, 30% - $75,000-99,999, 30% - $100,000 or more). Freelancers at the same time
has
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 got high high salaries too (5%, 15%, 40% and 40% considerably). Private companies workers
has
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have
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 got the smallest wage from the given(10%, 35%, 25% and 30%
consequently
). Glancing at
overall
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the overall
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 picture, the number of
graduates
 who continue the studying process is not high and is about 13%
while
 the type of employment with the highest wages as Anthropologist is government sector and the lowest ones are in the private one.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, work, students with synonyms.
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