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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.
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The
two
 plans illustrate the village of
the
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Ryemouth in 1995 and its present appearance.
Overall
, it can be seen a
significat
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significant
 changes in the present map compared to the 1995 plan
However
, facilities like golf ground, forest
park
, shops, car
park
 and
restaurant
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restaurants
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is
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have been
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 replaced and some features like
cafe
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a cafe
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 and hotel and housing remained
same
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the same
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. in 1995, there was a
farm land
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farmland
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 in the
north east
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northeast
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corner
 and
forest
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a forest
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park
at
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on
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 the east side which
are
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were
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 replaced by a large golf ground and
two
 tennis courts respectively.
In addition
, the cafe and the hotel at the east
corner
are
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remained
same
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the same
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 and
car
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the car
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park
is
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was
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 built near
to
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the
hooreover
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moreover
, there was a fish market
at
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 the
south
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southwest
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west
 side, which has been fully
relaced
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replaced
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 by apartments.
Furthermore
, shops which were at the
south
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southwest
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west
corner
 opposite
to
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the fish market
that
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those
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two
 divided by a road has been replaced by restaurant.
According to
 the 1995 plan, it can be seen a fishing port which has been
dissapeared
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disappeared
in
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 the present map.
Housing
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The housing
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 scheme at the
north
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northwest
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west
corner
west
 side
which is
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has
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 not changed during the period
while
two
 new houses
is
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are
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 built at the
west
corner
.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, park, corner, west with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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