The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided pie charts depict Australia's household
energy
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consumption and greenhouse
gas
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emissions which result from
this
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energy
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use.
Overall
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, heating water takes 30% of
energy
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and
also
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it produces the same amount of greenhouse
gas
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.
In addition
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, heating consumes the largest sum of
energy
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about 42%,
while
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it spreads only a low amount of toxic
gas
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,which is around 15%.
To begin
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with,
energy
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utilization for cooling, lighting and refrigeration are in less quantity, which are 2, 4, 7.
Furthermore
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, water heating is the second largest in using
energy
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,which is almost 30%.
Finally
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, some other
appliance
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appliances
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use only 15% of
energy
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.
On the other hand
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, cooling has the least per cent of 3 , in emitting greenhouse
gas
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.
Further
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, heating and refrigeration contribute 14 and 15,
while
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water heating alone makes the highest total of 32.
Lastly
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, lighting and other appliances give around 8 and 28.
To sum up
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, lighting and refrigeration
has
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have
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to double the amount of percentage
in
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apply
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emitting
gas
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than consuming
energy
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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