Most of the people in older time used to stay in the same place. Now many people keep changing places and move to various places during their life time. What Are the reasons for this? Do u think that it is a positive or a negative development?

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two statements have some negative and positive development.
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people
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they can be adapted to any
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because they are in one frame with their rituals and traditions
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have some negative and positive development, but in my personal opinion
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Your essay lacks a clear and logical structure, which makes it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. It is important to organize your essay into clear paragraphs with topic sentences that introduce the main idea of each paragraph. Each paragraph should then develop that idea with explanations and examples.
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You should include an introduction that clearly states the purpose of the essay and a conclusion to summarize the main points and restate your position. Ensure that the conclusion is a natural end to the discussion presented in the body of the essay.
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task achievement
Your response to the task is incomplete. You should fully address all parts of the task with a clear position throughout the response. Make sure to answer both questions: the reasons for the shift from staying in one place to moving places, and whether this is a positive or negative development.
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Ideas need to be expressed more clearly and comprehensively. You may want to focus on improving the development of your ideas, ensuring that they answer the question directly and that they are explained fully.
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Including relevant, specific examples would enhance your essay. These examples should support the points you're making and be directly linked to the question. Avoid general statements; provide tangible evidence or instances instead.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Job mobility
  • Cultural integration
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Urbanization
  • Relocation
  • Migration trends
  • Quality of life
  • Residential stability
  • Transience
  • Diaspora
  • Amelioration
  • Rootlessness
  • Nomadism
  • Expatriation
  • Adaptation
  • Displacement
  • Interconnectivity
  • Cosmopolitanism
  • Sustainability
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