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The illustrations below show how coffee is sometimes produced. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

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The process demonstrates the way in which coffee is manufactured.
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, there are twelve stages in the process, beginning with categorizing
beans
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 and culminating in
coffee
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the coffee
a coffee
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 package. In the first stage,
beans
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 are put into a sieve in order to be cleaned through water after being sorted by hand. Afterwards, cleaned
beans
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 are dehydrated by facing the sun for 4 weeks until completely dried. These
beans
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then
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 are raked and turned before storing in a silo for an extended period and preparing to be delivered to the mill. In the next stage, people hull these
beans
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 with a long tool to create a powder, after which, crushed
beans
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 are selected by grading through a grid resulting in coffee which is put into bags. One part of these is ready to be sold and the remaining part is roasted by a machine before being packed into bags and sold in the market.
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task achievement
For task achievement, ensure you fully develop your response with all key stages and details as required in the task. Be certain to provide comprehensive insights into the process, making your ideas and descriptions clearer.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, focus on creating a more logical sequence of information that clearly follows the progression of the coffee production process. Make better use of cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs smoothly.
coherence cohesion
Enhance your introduction and conclusion by providing a clearer overview of the complete process at the beginning and a succinct summarization that encapsulates all main points at the end while adhering to the task's requirements.
coherence cohesion
In terms of supporting main points, it's essential to illustrate the stages with specific examples or details that are distinctly relevant to the coffee production process, as this helps to demonstrate a thorough understanding of the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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