Writing Samples / Band 8 Nuclear power is a necessary evil. Despite the potential human and environmental consequences of radioactive fallout, nuclear energy is a genuine alternative to non-renewable energy sources like oil and coal, which are quickly running out. In short, the benefits of nuclear far outweigh the risks of using it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The using of nuclear power is becoming debatable.

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it is dangerous , others find it

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of nuclear far

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risks of using it.

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source like wind and solar.

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a long-term, low-carbon solution.

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,in the UK, the existing network of nuclear reactors produces 20% of their total electricity and has been running safely for more than 60

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the cons of using it obviously.

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4 paragraphs

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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