Writing Samples / Band 8 Nuclear power is a necessary evil. Despite the potential human and environmental consequences of radioactive fallout, nuclear energy is a genuine alternative to non-renewable energy sources like oil and coal, which are quickly running out. In short, the benefits of nuclear far outweigh the risks of using it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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The using of nuclear power is becoming debatable.
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thinks
advantages
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advantageous
This
essay will discuss why I agree the upside
of nuclear far Fix the agreement mistake
upsides
outweight
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outweigh
outweighs
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the
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the
risks of using it.
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First,
the cost of using nuclear energy
is lower than non-renewable energy
. Nuclear energy
is a low-carbon energy
source. Although
the
nuclear Correct article usage
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energy
stations need to take a considerable investment to built
, they Change the form of the verb
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run
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last
a long time and run at a lower cost compare
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other non-renewable
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another non-renewable energy source
other non-renewable energy sources
energy
source like wind and solar. Therefore
, they are more cost-effective in the long run.
Apart from that, nuclear energy
can help meet our country's demands for energy
because it’s reliable whatever the weather. Uranium is a raw material that's widely available, which makes nuclear power is
a long-term, low-carbon solution. Unnecessary verb
apply
For example
,in the UK, the existing network of nuclear reactors produces 20% of their total electricity and has been running safely for more than 60 year
.
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the cons of using it obviously.Correct your spelling
outweigh
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