The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.
The two maps illustrate how the
village
of Ryemouth has changed from 1995 up to present
.
Correct article usage
the present
Overall
, there have been more changes transforming the area
in to
Join the words
into
a
urban Change the article
an
area
with many accommodations constructed. The village
now is dominated by housing area
and its supporting facilities.
In 1995, the village
used to be more natural looking with forest in the central area
and farm land
in the northeast. Looking to the south, there Correct your spelling
farmland
ware
fish Correct your spelling
were
market
and fishing Fix the agreement mistake
markets
market
Fix the agreement mistake
markets
nearby
the sea. People used to visit Change preposition
near
Correct article usage
the cafe
cafe
which was located in Fix the agreement mistake
cafes
southeast
Add an article
the southeast
area
, Correct word choice
and was
was
not far from the fishing port. Unnecessary verb
apply
Moreover
, the accommodations which
built in that year were housing in the northwest and a hotel Correct pronoun usage
apply
which
located Correct pronoun usage
apply
nearby
the cafe.
The Change preposition
near
village
now looks more urbanized. The farmland and forest park have been replaced by sports
Correct article usage
a sports
are
which Correct your spelling
area
included
Wrong verb form
includes
golf
field and two tennis courts. Correct article usage
a golf
Moreover
, the fish market and fishing port have been removed and being
replaced by apartments. The shop Unnecessary verb
apply
are
Change the verb form
is
also
has
been removed, with a new Unnecessary verb
apply
restauralnt
Correct your spelling
restaurant
area
has
been constructed as the replacement. Wrong verb form
having
In addition
, new
car park has been built and Correct article usage
a new
ocated
exactly beside the hotel.Correct your spelling
located
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