Some people think that it is the responsibility of governments to take care of the environment, while others believe that it is the responsibility of people to take care of the environment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
The earth has been destroyed
due to
over-exploitation of the environment. It is argued that the Linking Words
government
has the responsibility to take care of the environment Use synonyms
while
others think that it is the Linking Words
Use synonyms
people
task. In my opinion, Change noun form
people's
while
the Linking Words
government
working on environmental laws and policies, promoting eco-friendly movement could be done by the Use synonyms
people
. A Use synonyms
collaborations
is needed to save the environment.
On the one hand, the Change the noun form
collaboration
government
has the power to influence other stakeholders. The environmental Use synonyms
problem
is complex Use synonyms
due to
the involvement of the Linking Words
government
, the private sector and the society. The authorities could play a role as a bridge which connects their interests. In Indonesia, Use synonyms
for instance
, the Linking Words
government
has successfully issued a law regarding the use of plastic bags. Use synonyms
As a result
, Linking Words
the
society has been pushed to Correct article usage
apply
brig
their own bag for shopping. Correct your spelling
bring
According to
the data, Linking Words
this
policy can Linking Words
reduced
70% of plastic Change the verb form
reduce
bags
usage among the society.
Change the noun form
bag
On the other hand
, the community could Linking Words
works
together to Change the verb form
work
rise
general awareness on environmental issues. Correct your spelling
raise
Moreover
, Linking Words
people
Use synonyms
also
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has
responsibility Change the verb form
have
on
Change preposition
for
this
issue because it is their daily Linking Words
problem
. Technically speaking, the community could Use synonyms
rise
Correct your spelling
raise
the
awareness by making Correct article usage
apply
education
events Replace the word
educational
as well as
promoting eco-friendly Linking Words
message
via social media. Fix the agreement mistake
messages
For example
, there is a community namely river guardian which actively Linking Words
cleaning
the river from Wrong verb form
cleans
the
Correct article usage
apply
domestics
waste. They Change the noun form
domestic
are
not only practically tackled the river waste Verb problem
have
problem
but Use synonyms
also
Linking Words
promoting
their activity Wrong verb form
promoted
in
social media to raise Change preposition
on
people
's awareness.
Use synonyms
To conclude
, Linking Words
although
the Linking Words
government
should take Use synonyms
bigger
responsibility in Add an article
a bigger
term
of Fix the agreement mistake
terms
policy
and influencing power, Add an article
the policy
people
should Use synonyms
also
Linking Words
make
an Correct your spelling
take
innitiative
to solve Correct your spelling
initiative
environmental
Add an article
the environmental
an environmental
Use synonyms
problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
as well as
Linking Words
promoting
their Wrong verb form
promote
action
Fix the agreement mistake
actions
to
Change preposition
on
the
digital platforms. The environmental condition is a complex Correct article usage
apply
problem
which could only solved by a Use synonyms
collaborations
of Correct the article-noun agreement
collaboration
people
and the Use synonyms
government
.Use synonyms
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