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The table below presents the food consumption per a person weekly in European country in 1992, 2002, and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below presents the food consumption per a person weekly in European country in 1992, 2002, and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table reveals the numbers of weekly
food
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 consumption per individual in European nations in three decades (1992, 2002, and 2012), and the
food
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 is divided into five categories:
vegetables
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, meat, wheat, beans, and cheese.
Overall
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, from the beginning to the end of the
period
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, the most eaten is
vegetables
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, and the lowest consumed is cheese.
Whereas
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 meat had a downward trend, other
food
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 had an upward trend. Looking at the table in detail,
vegetables
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 emerged as the most consumed
food
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 in the entire
period
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; it started at 2140 and slowly rose before reaching a peak in 2012, at 2220.
In contrast
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 to
vegetables
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, meat began at 1148 in 1992 and experienced a slight fluctuation before it decreased in 2012, at 1132.
Furthermore
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, in 1992, wheat and beans mounted as the third and fourth
leveled
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levelled
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 off at 837 and 532 in turn.
Then
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, both gradually increased until the
last
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period
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, and stood at 977 and 590, respectively.
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, cheese appeared as the least consumed over the
period
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, beginning with 113 in 1992;
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, it rose minimally to 125 in 2002 and remained stable until the end.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, vegetables, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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