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The table below shows the average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on daily activities

The table below shows the average hours and minutes spent by UK males and females on daily activities
A glance at a table chart provided reveals the
amount
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 of
time
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 spent by UK men and women on various daily activities, measured in
hour
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hours
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 and
minute
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minutes
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 per day.
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, sleeping takes up the most remarkable proportion for
both
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 genders. In terms of the
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 of
time
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 spent on personal demand, sleep takes up the first rank with higher than 8 hours for
both
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 males and females. The
remainSing
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remaining
 namely eating and drinking, resting and personal care make up the least significant
amount
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 of
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 and can be grouped into the range from 0,4 to 1,25. With regard to the
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 squandered on entertainment, the total
time
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 for men is a little higher than that of women with 5,25 and 4,23 respectively. To be more specific, the
time
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splurged
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 on watching TV and listening to music
are
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 entertainment which is given the highest preference with over 2 hours for
both
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 genders., narrowly followed by
that
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apply
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of
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social life and entertainment with less than 1 hour compared to the previous data. Meanwhile, the least
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 of
time
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 in a day is accounted for by sport in
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 males and females. The remaining
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 as hobbies and games
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 reading can range from 0,23 to 0,37. As for the
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 squandered on work and personal individual responsibility, most of the men’s
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 is less than that of women except for employment and study
along with
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 travel with 3,45 and 1,32
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respectively
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. In stark contrast, the
time
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 spent on housework of females is two as much as that of males with exactly 3.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, time, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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