The graph shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over in major developed countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph shows the proportion of population aged 65 and over in major developed countries.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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The three trends provide information about the people who are 65 years and above in
the
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nations
such
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as
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Sweeden
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, Japan
as well
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as
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America.In overview, all three countries experienced
a
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growth in a period of a century from 1940 to 2040. To start with, in
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, humans started with about 7% of the population in 1940 and increased up to 9% after 20 years in around 1960.
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, it
grews
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grows
grew
up
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to twenty per cent in 2020,
while
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fluctuations began until it
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its maximum of 25% in 2040.To add on, Japan
also
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commenced with a least percentage of the society ranging from 65 years old and over,
whereas
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, as times moves on, it will be the highest,
this
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means that it will be all over America and
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.
Moreover
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, a sharp climb shall occur between 2030 and 2040 from about 10% rising to 25 per cent in less than two decades.
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, since Japan spent almost 30 annuals below the others, it will
also
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surpass
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and the United States of America
at the end
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of the period, which is close to 2040.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sweeden with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion
  • Aged population
  • Developed countries
  • Trends
  • Demographics
  • Percentage points
  • Elderly dependency ratio
  • Comparative analysis
  • Statistical data
  • Population aging
  • Societal impact
  • Policy implications
  • Age demographics
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Data interpretation
  • Forecast
  • Longevity
  • Birth rate
  • Life expectancy
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