Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas.

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of
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damages both groups, the rich and the poor. Over the
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decades
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we can see powerful
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are trying to protect and help developing
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. They are insisting
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that all
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should be developed and the power should be balanced between them. It is obvious that
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help each other, especially
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to make
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balance. I think it is an excellent idea, poorer
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will be improved and
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can be handled easier. I believe it helps poorer economies to stay
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western
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are
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without any international help and communication, we can not expect
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all
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baheve
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well with their people. There would be no human
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in most
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, because on
one
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hand, after a
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kings or presidents would be addicted to power and lose their
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, people will not obey their government because they are former and uneducated
human kind
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humankind

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and war and in
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term
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no
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countries
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will be safe.
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, in an isolated
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, when
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resist
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each other, disease and viruses, that are caused by nature or
human
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, would make a
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for poorer
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and if richer
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will not handle and execute
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of worldwide spreads, maybe it would have been in all
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and bother
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too.
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why the
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. Another reason that developed
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want to communicate and help
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is that they want to sell their products. Industrial
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need to sell the products, so they need customers and the third
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countries
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, which have
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market for them. If poor
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can not buy products from them, industries will be closed and destroyed.
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this
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reason, powerful
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are trying to help poor
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to stay
update
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and develop them
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demand. It helps the flow of money in international
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.
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, I agree with helping poorer
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from first
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countries
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, because all
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are important for our
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mechanism, some of them are producing agriculture and supply our food like
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Netherland
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and Ukraine, and some of them make facilities for us like industrial
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such
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as Germany. All are important because the
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of these
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depend
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on low or
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and they knew that, so they
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The essay lacked a clear and coherent structure, which made the flow of ideas somewhat challenging to follow. To improve in this area, consider outlining the main points before writing and ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Introductions and conclusions are essential to signal the beginning and end of your argument clearly.
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To address the task more completely, make sure to explicitly relate your arguments to the prompt. This means clearly stating how health, education, and trade improvements can contribute to the development of poorer nations and the role of richer nations in this process. Use specific examples to substantiate your points. Additionally, conclusions should link back to the prompt, reinforcing how your discussion relates to the question at hand.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underdeveloped nations
  • economic disparity
  • global cooperation
  • moral obligation
  • historical exploitation
  • interconnected world
  • economic stability
  • quality of life
  • trade relationships
  • humanitarian aid
  • capacity building
  • dependency syndrome
  • sustainable development
  • bilateral agreements
  • economic priorities
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