You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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The bar graph details the trend of weekly earnings that families spent in one country in 1968 and 2018. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that the families spent their earnings in eight
group
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with the highest number being food in 1968
while
the lowest were personal equipment and fuel and power in 2018. The same value of weekly earnings was shared by household furniture both in the different years which
at
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approximately 8%. In 1968, the popular division for weekly spent was food which marked 35%
while
the lowest was fuel and power which spent just above 5%. Housing
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shared the same point with clothing and footwear which numbered 10%. The remaining group
such
as household furniture, personal equipment, transport and leisure had slightly different numbers of spent just below 10%. In 2018, the most division that families sent their weekly income came from leisure which marked just over 20%.
In contrast
, the same number had spent both on personal equipment and fuel and power less than 5%. At just over 15%, nearly 15% and 20% were spent on a family's weekly income (Food, housing and transport, respectively). The remaining group
such
as household goods and clothing and footwear were spent at just below 10%.
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