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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Given are two graphs concerning the culprit why
land
polutted
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polluted
 issue.
While
 the pie chart reveals the reason
of
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degradation
,the table illustrates
this
problem
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 influence in some
region
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regions
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,counted in
percent
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,during the
90’s
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.
Overall
,
Over-gazing
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Over-grazing
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 was the main cause of worldwide
land
degradation
.Europe has experienced the most significant levels of
land
degradation
. As for culprits of global
and
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deterioration, Over-gazing took up the first rank with 35,closely followed by deforestation with 30.Meanwhile,
Over-cultivation
 and others constituted the most insignificant number with 28 and 7 respectively. With respect to the justification leading to the
degradation
 in
land
 quality in specific areas,Europe suffered from the most influence with 23 of
total
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land
 degraded.At the opposite end of the scale ,
just
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 only 5 of
total
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 soil in North America was eroded.Meanwhile ,there was 13 of
total
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land
 must be negatively affected .With regard to
the
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Europe,the chief factor triggering soil
eroded
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 was deforestation with 9.8 ,closely followed by
over-cultivation
as well as
 over-grazing with 7.7 and 5.5 respectively.In terms of
Ocenia
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Oceania
,Over-grazing plays a paramount significant role in reducing soil quality with 11.3.
Whereas
 there was no response detecting any emergence by
over-cultivation
.Regarding North
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america
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,
Over-cultivation
 was the main factor with 3.3%
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words land, degradation, over-cultivation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie chart
  • Table
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Decreasing productivity
  • Reasons
  • Regional variations
  • Data
  • Summarize
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