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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuels source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuels source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate how much electricity was produced from various fuel sources in Australia and France in the two years 1980 and 2000.
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, Australia's main source of electricity came from coal which is more than half of the total
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while
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 France's production of electricity from nuclear power plants increased
at the end
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 of the period than the previous year.
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, both countries total production of energy
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 significantly increased
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 of the period It can be seen that coal was the main source of energy produced in Australia. At the beginning of the period, almost half a portion of the power generated from coal and it is increased to more than half in the year 2000, at 50
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 from 130
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.
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, other sources of energy largely reduced in 2000 , at 36
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 from hydropower and only 2
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 from each oil and gas.
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, in France,
total
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the total
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 production of power almost doubled from 90
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 to 180
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 in 2000. The largest amount of
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 produced

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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